Friday, August 28, 2015

The creative writings of my peers

These posts were all, great and appealing to the reader. Whether it be me or someone else, they were all written by some talented writers. I really found the way that Glenda personified the gum in her story. Making it more of a funny comedy than a spooky or sad story, I’m really looking forward to applying that to my own writing later on down the road. Tanners post about the nutcracker and how it was a “cursed object” as it may be called was very interesting. Giving off a spooky, creepy vibe that I really enjoyed and didn’t know how to quite describe it. Laura’s tragedy type writing brought up allot of memories of the smokers in my family and how devastating smoking can be on one’s health. Glenda’s post was a nice ending post due to the hilarity to follow a creepy story and a tragedy.
 
Hi Laura. This piece was amazing! Absolutely marvelous! it brought me back to seeing my uncle and grandfather smoking, and me trying to get them to stop. i would agree with tanner by saying the ending was my favorite because it was done tastefully and with mystery. This was a great piece, thank you for sharing.

Aye, Glenda, This was seriously one of the funniest stories i have ever read. The way you humanized the gum and told their stories was actually really interesting. The way you gave them a job as to apposed to them just being chewed for pleasure was very creative and i enjoyed it. i really look forward to what you'll come up with next.


Hello Tanner, you had a very great story. it was very detailed and kept me very interested throughout the entire story.

Thursday, August 27, 2015

When a trashcan fights back

Jordan Mortimer
Mrs. Fraser
Creative Writing
August 26, 2015
Trash Can
            Why am I writing about a trash can? I know it’s a strange item to choose, but if I told you why I chose it, it would defeat the purpose of me writing about it. Just know this, the story behind it still makes me laugh today. It all started when my uncle and cousin askd if I wanted to go to Florida with them. My uncle, cousin and I are all really close, so when they asked I automatically said yes. It had been a couple years since I had been to Florida last, my family doesn’t really take many trips. They didn’t really like the idea of me going without them because they enjoyed the beach and thought it was somewhat unfair that I was going and they were stuck in misery, or Missouri as it’s also called. But nonetheless they said that I could go as long as I checked in with them every day. I later found out checking in was easier said than done. After a night of rushed packing and a few hours of sleep, we went to meet with my aunt and cousin so that they could take me down to their house because they don’t exactly live close. Once we met up we got a quick bite to eat and then said our goodbyes, about an hour later we were at their house. We roll up to my uncle getting things ready, loading the roof rack, setting the bikes on the rack, just getting the essential things done.
            If I haven’t mentioned already, my uncle, cousin and I are all cyclists. Mountain, road, cycle cross, we have tried it all. But we decided we’d take the mountain bikes and try to get a little trail time in.  Just so you know, mountain biking doesn’t really pan out in the Florida panhandle, due to the lack of a key element in the sport, MOUNTAINS. Maybe the trails weren’t great but the rides were, mainly because we didn’t limit ourselves to the trails. We took rides around the strip and things of that sort. We spent little time in our hotel room, even though the weather was what a tropical storm had left over and blown in. With the weather throwing out high winds it brought about high waves, our idea was, for lack of a better word idiotic, but we went to the surf shop around the corner and bought a few $5 pool rafts and ran to the beach. We would go to just before the waves would break and lay on them, flowing over the 10-20 foot waves with speed and ferocity. The current was strong but we were able to keep from being swept to sea, for the most part. After a while we noticed we were growing a crowd of people out on their balconies. I can only imagine what they were thinking, I feel it was probably something like “these idiots are going to get killed” or “wow, that is insane”. Like I said I have no idea what they thought, but quite frankly, I didn’t care. I mean, why would I? After getting slammed by waves we gave in and went back inside, got showered and waited out the rain. Later that day the rain came to a halt. We waited until around nine and grabbed our bikes off the rack. Then we just rode around for a while, jumping off stuff, riding down stairs, all sorts of fun stuff. But I am fairly hard on bikes, so naturally, I broke something. So if you’ve ever been to Destin Florida, you know that there is that bridge that crosses over into Fort Walton. We rode from our condo, across Destin, to the bridge. We then rode across and into Fort Walton, rode around there until probably one in the morning. Then we started back, riding back through fort Walton and along the roads until we reached the bridge again. We started up the bridge, and reached the top with ease then we began the decent. We were probably doing 20 mph when we got to the end of the bridge. But at the end, there was a trashcan that left barely enough room for our handlebars to pass by. As we passed my uncle yells out “trashcan” and I do the same, but my cousin comes

down and says “my cat eye says were going 23 miles per hou…” and that’s when he hit the trashcan. Hearing the load knock of the bars on the trashcan, my uncle and I turn around to the hilarity of my cousin slamming. We did make sure he was okay, trying not to laugh too hard. He was fine just a little bruised so we grabbed his bike, got him on it, and then went to get some donuts and freezes. Once we were done with our food. We went back to the condo and that’s where the story end. It may sound lame to you, but that will be a story and memory I will carry with me for the rest of my days.

Thursday, August 20, 2015

I Am Poem

Jordan Mortimer
Mrs. Fraser
Creative Writing
19 August 2015
I Am…
I am..
The oldest of three, the most laid back of all
A fun time, immaturity in its most pure form
16 but more a 12 year old at heart
A son, the guinne pig for all, school and anything untried
A cyclist, this is where I thrive
The adrenaline junky, no fears, no limits, no regrets
A nephew, with an uncle like an older brother, an aunt like a sister and a cousin like a best friend
Tall, with no interest in typical and traditional athletics
Blue eyes, and long hair
A car guy, imports, classics, they’re all my style
Simple minded, one to live day by day and not sweat the small stuff
Born and raised in Springfield
Living as a health enthusiast, my health is literally my life
Glad my poem is nearly complete
Hopeful my poem is up to standards, poems are not my forte